When I write something, my description tends to be lengthy.
This has been remaining since I was a university student in Japan.
I remember I was indicated my too long wording by a professor in those days.
Almost the same thing is happening to me. My course mate indicated.
But it is not too bad to get to know my mistakes.
Anyway, grammar is difficult for me and English wording is very distinct to Japanese.
I wasn't taught the English wording at schools.